just an idea.
Keep the setting in the coffee shop. Use the music to represent the pace of the store. For example in New York mid-day is a busy time. Talk about the rushing in of customer after customer.
that's just an idea to get the thoughts flowing.

First of all, thank you very much for the favorite and your comments. Also, I like your idea, and I may see if I can't use it to get the juices flowing again, at least. But I'd like to keep the setting a little more familiar to me, so writing it is a bit more natural. For example, I live and work in a small college city, and there's one coffee shop in particular I hang out at all the time. They open very early and close very late, and that's sort of where this story is based. Hence the line, "The only other people up at this hour are college kids....." And the music I'm imagining is very slow and relaxed. Have you ever heard "Just Don't Think I'll Ever Get Over You" by Colin Hay? That's what I was listening to when this was written. Note, not shooting your idea down, just trying to take it and make it a little more natural. Thank you again for the suggestion and the favorite.

Jon

Hmmm, could that coffee shop be Aspen??? lol.

Again, not too sure where to go with this or how to help you. Too brain dead at the moment. I'll comment again when I'm not trying to cram random anatomy facts and stat programs into my head. lol.

I like this. I like coffee and i like this. A great idea.

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